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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
Growing working class has resulted in a huge requirement of new homes to be constructed in
vicinity
Suggestion
the vicinity
 of the job, but since most of these areas are mega metropolitan areas there is hardly any room to
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
 new homes
,
Accept space
,
so there is no other option but to expand into the
country
rural regions
countryside
side
.
Although
 many believe that the
country
rural regions
countryside
side
 should not be polluted by the expanding
population
, there is no other way to provide new area where facilities and homes can be built upon. Some argue that our
country
rural regions
countryside
side
 is where we grow our food and cannot be used up for new homes. When an area is converted to colonies of homes, the resources like ground water and rich soil
that is
 required for farming is used up. With the growing human
population
, there is
also
 a growth in food demand and
this
 cannot be met when the agricultural areas are slowly being converted to colonies of human
population
. Thanking the advancement of medicine, the ever growing human
population
also
 needs more place to live. With the increase in human
population
, most people want to live in areas that are close to their work and where the facilities are ample. If the
country
 sides are not developed to house these needs, the buildings will only have to grow vertically and
such
 a situation cannot be environmentally viable, as
this
 tends to take a lot more resources of the location. There is a need to find more land that will cater all our needs.
Untill
Suggestion
Until
then
 the only way is to continue as we do
now which
Accept comma addition
now, which
 is moving the
population
 into
country
Suggestion
the country side
side
 and moving the
country
side
 into
to
being one more than one
two
 forests and eventually moving the forest life into zoo parks.

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