In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
Previously, people use to buy
nessecities
as part of our daily tasks. Recently, due to the increased leisure time and financial income, shopping has become a hobby for many young people. Unfortunately, I believe the condition of being essential or indispensable
necessities
this
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affect
our society and culture in a negative way, and should be stopped.
Shopping extensively on a regular bases, cause many people to put over Suggestion
affects
has affected
is affecting
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on our external look rather than our personality. special importance or significance
emphasis
emphasise
emphasize
Furthermore
, the thrill of buying a new present cause us instant pleasure and, as a consequence, we become impatient and Linking Words
loose
the ability to wait. fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
For example
, people who constantly buy new outfits, Linking Words
such
as shirts, pants and shoes, are more likely to judge a person based on his outfit, rather than his personality. Linking Words
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have been shown
in a recent publication by Harvard Suggestion
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has shown that in the Accept comma addition
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last
decade, where the rates of shopping increased by 25%, people have reported to judge people primarily based on their outfit.
Aside from the above mentioned, I Linking Words
also
think that the main Linking Words
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shopping is a negative trend, is because I a rational motive for a belief or action
reason
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believe there are more with strength or in a strong manner
strongly
imprtant
things to do in our leisure time. Many things, of great significance or value
important
such
as reading books, going to the Linking Words
theater
or a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
traveling
, increase our knowledge and contribute to our society substantially morethe act of going from one place to another
travelling
,
than buying a new watch. Changes in the young people vocabulary, Accept space
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example, have been directly linked to reduced reading time. appropriate to; intended for
for
Also
, lack of history and musical knowledge have been associated with reduced instrument playing.
To conclude, I believe shopping should not be considered as a hobby, and should be Linking Words
restricte
. There are far more important things to do, like reading or subject to restriction or subjected to restriction
restricted
traveling
which could promote our knowledge and culture.the act of going from one place to another
travelling
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite