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In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

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With increasing employment opportunities across the world, people are finding it beneficial to move to different places,
instead
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 of staying in
one
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place
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 throughout their
life
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. It is quite interesting to explore and experience various cultures of many people,
hence
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 people tend to move from
one
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place
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 to another often. Fixating at
one
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place
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 has its own advantages and disadvantages. Residing
at
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in
one
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place
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 brings people closer.
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, in the earlier days, people preferred to be a part of joint families and owned large houses in their respective villages or towns. Moving apart from their
loving
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loved
 ones is a taboo except in rare scenarios. Eventually,
this
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 helps establishing strong connections among people.
On the other hand
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, regular shifting would cost an arm and a leg.
Although
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,
this
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 method limits the knowledge and opportunities, people in the past, preferred a safe and secure
life
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 over nomadic
life
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. Working in several cities and countries provides us with a chance to earn in dollars,
there by
by that means or because of that
thereby
 elevating their standard of living.
For example
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, a software engineer in foreign countries can own a property in
short period
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a short period
 of time compared to
a
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an
 engineer in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
.
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, these days people are interested to lead a
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
that is
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 simple and interesting.
Also
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, they do not have the burden or responsibility of large families
that is
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 stopping them to shift places. So,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 can conclude saying that, both have their own advantages and disadvantages, and it is up on the interest of
individual
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the individual
individuals
an individual
 to choose his
life
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 style according to the situation, and
also
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,
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 the pros and cons of each.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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