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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Now a
days
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day
, people visiting to places with extreme weather conditions like Sahara Desert and Antarctica
has been increaisng
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have been increasing
has been increasing
. There are quite some advantages
with
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to
this
,
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,
for example
, people learn new survival
tecniques
a practical method or art applied to some particular task
techniques
.
On the other hand
, one main disadvantage with
this
 is people have to face unpredictable health issues. One main benefit of
visitng
the activity of making visits
visiting
 places that has extreme conditions is people learn survival tricks. It challenges people to survive as the weather and surviving conditions are very harsh.
For example
,
last
 year BBC channel conducted a show in which 20 volunteers were left on an island for 30 days and it showed how people fed themselves, arranged housing with little
resources
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Resources
 that they have. The biggest drawback to visit places that has
unsual
not usual or common or ordinary
unusual
usual
 climatic
conditons
the prevailing context that influences the performance or the outcome of a process
conditions
condition
 is falling sick. Our human body takes time to adapt
to
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With
To
 the environmental changes and travelling to a new
place especially
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place, especially
 to an extreme cold or a hot place
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 our health.
For instance
, it was published in
Chicago Times newspaper
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the Chicago Times newspaper
a Chicago Times newspaper
 that 30 out 50 people who visited Sahara Desest had sun burns and suffered from high
fever
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Fever
 as their skin was never exposed to high temperatures before. In conclusion, there is a gradual increase in people visiting places that has unfavourable weather conditions.
Although
,
this
 can lead to some unavoidable health issues
,
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,
 some people benefit by learning new survival techniques
.
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.
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