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Some people think that job satification is more important than job security . Others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and having parment job is more important

#people #job #satification #security #parment
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Jobs has been played a remarkable role in everyone's life
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pople
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
peoples
 think that
job
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satification
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
 is more
sinificant
important in effect or meaning
significant
 as
compare
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compared
 to
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 security
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some people reckon that fixed
job
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 is more important It is
undoubetdly
without doubt; certainly
undoubtedly
 true that the fixed
job
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 has numerous
benfits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
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the
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The
First
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 and
formost
ranking above all others
foremost
 is that
employee
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employees
the employee
 have a stable
creer
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
carrier
carer
 and as
parmanet
continuing or enduring without marked change in status or condition or place
permanent
job
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 mean a flow of money through which they can
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their family basic needs easily as compare to those who are
ferquently
many times at short intervals
frequently
chage
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changing
change
charged
 their jobs.
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if a person doing
same
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the same job
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 for many years
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they will get more experience as well as experienced staff can be more
trustworthy which is
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trustworthy, which is
also
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 more
sinificant
important in effect or meaning
significant
significance
 for companies. Moving
further
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parmanent
continuing or enduring without marked change in status or condition or place
permanent
 jobs
provied
give something useful or necessary to
provide
good pension
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a good pension
good pensions
 for order time so they cannot be
burden
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burdened
 for children in near future
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Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
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 people with permanent jobs do not have to worry about financial issues as they secure their
parsent
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
present
 and future. In
adition
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
 to some people love to enjoy their hobbies of music
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sports
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or travel around the world
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therefore while
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therefore, while
 doing
permannet
continuing or enduring without marked change in status or condition or place
permanent
job
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, people can enjoy their life and remain
financilly
from a financial point of view
financially
secured
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secure
 and satisfied
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 "different people think differently " they opine that
job
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satification
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
 may often
result a healthy
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result in a healthy
 mind in
healthy body
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a healthy body
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if a person
find
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finds
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with
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to
job
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satification
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
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they will work more productive way as compare to those who are doing
there
of them or themselves
their
job
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 only for money
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Moreover
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satified
endorsed authoritatively as having met certain requirements
certified
employss
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employers
employer
 may
also
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 concentrate on their personal communication and make better work balance
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 In order to put hammer on the
last
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 nail,
job
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 satisifaction should be considered while accepting jobs ,security is more much significant for leading comfortable and free life

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