With the development of technology and science, some people believe that there is no great value of artists such as musicians and painters. What are the things artists can do but the scientist cannot? Why should we encourage the art area?

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It is true that

science

and technology, nowadays, have

benefitted

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benefited

the whole world in all aspects. Albeit it is undoubted that various technological and scientific developments have

tremedously

extremely

tremendously

enhanced our lifestyle, but

refers to the speaker or writer

firmly believe that

art

cultural

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culture

cultures

and traditions still play an essential

roles

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role

out

of or belonging to us

our

lives. There are so many things that artists can teach us in the field that scientists have failed to.

To begin

with, there are concepts

such

as feelings, emotions and inspiration that comes from arts, whereas

science

and technology cannot offer them due to its focus on practicality.

For example

, an audience can indirectly experience and have a feeling of melody from listening to

bethoven's

pieces which was composed while he was suffering from unfortunate events.

In contrast

science

cannot offer

this

because it is unable to deliver

such

feeling.

Additionally

, a piece of abstract

art

has no meaning in

science but

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science, but

has great stories to tell when we consider it an

art

. In the world of arts, beauty matter in and of

themselves whereas in

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themselves, whereas in

science

, the only true measure is whether it works or not.

Arts

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The arts

offer us a

spritual

concerned with sacred matters or religion or the church

spiritual

look of

life

while scientist teaches us just an opposite. Since the arts

brings

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bring

a lot of benefits to us so I argue that it must and should be encouraged to some extents. Enjoying

arts

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the arts

promotes

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promote

the habit of self-reflection. If you walk into the

art

gallery, attend to a concert or even just stay to read a book, you almost certainly begin to think about your inner value. For me,

this

is an invaluable lesson in

life

because if we begin to reflect about ourselves, we

begin

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are beginning

not to just become more human, but

also

consider the lies of other too.

Moreover

, creative people can boost us emotionally and change our

feeling

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feelings

For example

, a lot of Mozart's fans would love to listen to his music pieces because they feel

relieves

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relieved

and motivated, so music can controls our emotions and switch them in a positive ways. In conclusion, there is no denying the fact that

science

and technology have great value in our

life

, but in term of arts, it can teaches us many aspects of

life

that the former cannot

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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With the development of technology and science, some people believe that there is no great value of artists such as musicians and painters. What are the things artists can do but the scientist cannot? Why should we encourage the art area?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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