It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Many people think that the
punishment
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of the children is the best
way
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to teach them to be a good person.
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essay disagrees with
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, because the children who was punished when they was young, they may grow up with a
depression
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. A better
way
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to teach them is giving the
love
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and talk what the true and false.
Initially
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, the
punishment
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is the popular kind to teach the children in many countries, but it is not a good
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to teach them. If the children was punished,
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they will punish their children in the future too.
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, the psychological studies reported that the children who be punished, they have the most probability to be a
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, and in some case can have a suicide. My online friend,
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, her mother
hit
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her every morning, when she was young.
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affect to her at present, she has a
depression
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while she was only 13 years old.
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is a clear example that the
punishment
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is a bad choice.
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, the
love
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and talking is better. The teachers and parents can give some
hug
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to let their child know about the
love
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, they will receive and give the
love
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to the other people too. If they are angry or annoying,
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, the
hug
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method is not positive effect, the parents should be calm and let them alone just a moment. But during that time the parents have to stand near by them until they can control their emotions. After that, the parents should talk with them about the cause and reason why you have to let them calm down with their self, and
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demonstrated the right and wrong things.
For instance
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, the Broken series in Thailand, it is relevant to the student who has a problem from the parents divorce. The teacher, Kru Sai is a psychologist, use these methods (separate the angry children, and give a
hug
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to them)
then
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the children can control their emotions more than the past. In conclusion, the children who be punished may be a good or bad person. Even the most of people opine
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a right
way
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, but the
punishment
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can cause the
depression
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too. From those examples above, I agree with the other
way
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,
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as a
hug
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and
love
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, is a better
way
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to teach them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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