It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

Many people think that the
punishment
of the children is the best
way
to teach them to be a good person.
This
essay disagrees with
this
, because the children who was punished when they was young, they may grow up with a
depression
. A better
way
to teach them is giving the
love
and talk what the true and false.
Initially
, the
punishment
is the popular kind to teach the children in many countries, but it is not a good
way
to teach them. If the children was punished,
then
they will punish their children in the future too.
Furthermore
, the psychological studies reported that the children who be punished, they have the most probability to be a
depression
, and in some case can have a suicide. My online friend,
for example
, her mother
hit
Suggestion
hits
her every morning, when she was young.
This
affect to her at present, she has a
depression
while she was only 13 years old.
This
is a clear example that the
punishment
is a bad choice.
In contrast
, the
love
and talking is better. The teachers and parents can give some
hug
to let their child know about the
love
, they will receive and give the
love
to the other people too. If they are angry or annoying,
moreover
, the
hug
method is not positive effect, the parents should be calm and let them alone just a moment. But during that time the parents have to stand near by them until they can control their emotions. After that, the parents should talk with them about the cause and reason why you have to let them calm down with their self, and
also
demonstrated the right and wrong things.
For instance
, the Broken series in Thailand, it is relevant to the student who has a problem from the parents divorce. The teacher, Kru Sai is a psychologist, use these methods (separate the angry children, and give a
hug
to them)
then
the children can control their emotions more than the past. In conclusion, the children who be punished may be a good or bad person. Even the most of people opine
that is
a right
way
, but the
punishment
can cause the
depression
too. From those examples above, I agree with the other
way
,
such
as a
hug
and
love
, is a better
way
to teach them.

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