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Many people opine that all university students should study whatever they like, whereas some people think the university should teaching some subjects that only related to science and technology for students.

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Many people opine that all
university
 students should
study
 whatever they like, whereas some people think the
university
 should teach some subjects that only related to
science
 and technology for students. In my opinion, teaching only
science
 and technology subjects in the
university
 can increase the number of graduates in these subjects, but it will be better if have the quality graduates in all subjects because students like that thing they learn. If the
university
 teaching only
science
 and technology, student will choose to
study
 some
subject
 in
this
 area. A number of graduates in these subjects will be increased, but some students have to learn about something they do not really like.
For example
, my friend
study
 about computer programs at the
university
 because her father said working in
this
 field can make a lot of money. After graduating, she is a programmer, but she does not like her job and try to find a new career. Students who
study
subject
 that they like will be a quality graduate and they can be a professional in their career, whether
science
 or art. They have fun with their job because they like it and their job will useful for other people. My uncle,
for instance
, he really loves music and he chose to
study
 about music at the
university
. Presently, he is a music teacher and children very happy when learn with him. In conclusion, every
subject
 in the
university
 is useful for people, so students should have an opportunity to
study
 in a
subject
 that they like. I am convinced people who love their
subject
 and their career can be given the benefit for the community.

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