Many people work for long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or disadvantages?

Leisure
time
is important in our daily lives because it is the only period we have to rest and bond with family and friends. It has been said that working for a longer period has become a norm and lifestyle for numerous people with little
time
left for recreational activities.
Although
the level of people's
proffessionalism
the expertness characteristic of a professional person
professionalism
depends on the number of hours spent on their profession, the disadvantages are more because it can lead to inability to discover hidden talents about themselves and can
also
cause sudden illness that they are ignorant about as the body needs sufficient
time
to rest. Working for long periods of
time
on a daily basis makes people to concentrate and achieve the best out of their goal and objectives at work.
This
makes them become experts in their chosen fields in the long run.
For example
, my cousin, who got employed as a
trainees
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trainee
in a bank some years back and never had
time
for any other activities has become a professional marketer because he took his
time
to learn the skills of marketing.
Therefore
,
Accept space
,
people stay long hours to learn a particular skill or profession even if it will take them long hours to acquire those skills, and leave less
time
for leisure because they want to become a professional in their field. People working and leaving
litte
limited or below average in number or quantity or magnitude or extent
little
time
for recreational activities can lead to illness and having no
time
to discover their hidden talents. Working for longer periods can make care less for their body when they get I'll because they are totally engrossed in their profession and have little or no
time
to rest which could result to a sudden illness. They might not be able to have a personal discovery about themselves to know what other things they can do when they have little
time
for leisure activities.
For instance
, my brother, who is always on the field to collect data for his company never knew he had cancer until he
wasnt
was not
wasn't
able to go to work as usual.
Therefore
, working for longer periods can have a negative
effects
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effect
on the body. In conclusion, I believe the disadvantages are more than the advantages because having little or no
time
for other activities aside work can lead to sudden death
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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