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Some countries spend lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion?

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Nowadays most countries in the world are investing funds to make
bicycle
 usage convenient.
This
 essay analyse the reasons behind
this
 shift as well as provide insight on whether it's a
best
Suggestion
good
better
 solution to
traffic
 woes.
To begin
 with, increasing world population had a direct impact on the increasing number of vehicles on
road
Suggestion
the road
,
Accept space
,
which leads to
traffic
 congestion.
In addition
, it
also
 results in global warming. All countries of
world
Suggestion
the world
 are
adaopting
make fit for, or change to suit a new purpose
adapting
adopting
 preventing measures to overcome
serious issue
Suggestion
the serious issue
serious issues
 of global warming.
Furthermore
,
bicycle
Suggestion
the bicycle
bicycles
 is an option to get rid of
traffic
 woes. As some of the countries don't have a proper
pathways
Suggestion
pathway
 for
bicycle
 and
bicycle
 parking spaces, narrower roads in the old areas where riding a
bicycle
 is almost impossible.
Bicycle
Suggestion
The bicycle
A bicycle
 is not a solution to
traffic
 congestion as
bicycle
 use is limited only.
First
 of all,people don't want to ride
bicycle
 as it needs

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