It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion ? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

Children are tomorrow's
future
and to craft and design
future
solely depends upon guardians
/
parents and teachers.Many people support an
idealogy
an orientation that characterizes the thinking of a group or nation
ideology
that from
childhood
,
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,
child
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children
a child
the child
should be
educate
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educated
in
such
a way able to differentiate between good and bad.Whereas some people advocate that let children enjoy
childhood
without worrying about right and wrong thing. Many of us are aware about grasping power is very high in
childhood
,
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,
hence
if we try to teach
difference
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the difference
between good and bad will be very effective and it will make them capable to take wiser decision.By the time they will be able to take their decisions and it will
also
help them to craft their
future
.To be particular
,
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,
if
child
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the child
a child
children
can distinguish between right and
wrong
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wrong, then
then
he
/
she will know that activity what they are going to do is
helpfull
providing assistance or serving a useful function
helpful
or
harmfull
causing or capable of causing harm
harmful
.They can avoid bad consequences to
themselves which
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themselves, which
is most important at that point.
For
example many
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example, many
of us had heard about incidents where
child
swallowed
coin
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a coin
the coin
and
then
he
/
she along with parents have a suffered a lot and may
faced
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face
dired
fraught with extreme danger; nearly hopeless
dire
consequences.If
child
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the child
a child
is aware about that eating
/
drinking only food items is
right thing
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the right thing
and
other object
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the other object
is a bad
thing
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thing, then
then
they will not think upon taking objects in their mouth.To achieve
this
innovative ideas need to be implemented through digital media.
For example
:
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:
Cartoon Animated meaning full stories showcasing examples of good and bad and punishment related to that.If
student
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the student / child
a student / child
/
child
is
commiting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
mistakes he
/
she should write 10 good words and 10 opposite words etc.
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Hence, to
prevent mishaps
children researchers
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children, researchers
support early learning with some innovative learning techniques. Few people support that
childhood
should be free from all burdens and should be enjoyed without any hassles or worries.According to
them in
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them, in
childhood
brain is not fully developed if we try to pressurize
,
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,
child
growth will get impacted and few of the cases were reported in the past.In those cases school teacher
presssurize
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pressurizes
pressurize
student to study social ethics and if they fail to do they were abused and threatened.In early
age students
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age, students
are unable to handle learning pressure and on top of it pressure will make them mentally sick and due to
this
other
impcats
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impact
impacts
cannot be ignored. In my opinion
,
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,
early learning is a good idea to craft a better
future
but should be practised in a balanced way
.
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.
Kids should enjoy their
childhood
parallely
being everywhere equidistant and not intersecting
parallel
they should learn to distinguish between good
/
bad
,
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,
correct
/
incorrect things.

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