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2. Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Environmental safety is the accountability of authorities and individuals, because each one and parity has a role in protecting the environment from any harm
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I am of the belief that
individual
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the individual
an individual
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 the authorities' roles
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 the both sets of roles should be
collaborated
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collaborating
 to initiate the optimal achievement
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This
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influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
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 and citizen should do
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 On one hand the roles of human being in protecting
environment
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the environment
 are two major ones
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 each one should pay attention for each single
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action
 which has been doing in his regular activity.
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Firstly each
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Firstly, each
 citizen should be aware of what can cause harm to the
environmental
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environment
 surrounding, due to avoid any type of harm
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Secondly
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it is really important
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for
 adherence to these methods which will provide us with
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a safe
 surrounding. Research studies have shown that applications of safety measures
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 as separation of organic and non-organic disposables and avoidance of using non-biodegradable and toxic materials which enhance the pollution amount and conserve many of sea
creatures
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creatures'
 lives.
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 to these measures tackle a myriad of issues
globally
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global
 and nationally like global warming
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the official authorities should investigate two main concerns about environmental safety
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 To start with the most significant domain to be
impose
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imposed
 rigorous laws to deter any violation of rules and regulation that should be done for
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 periodical monitoring and close observation should be done to ensure that everyone follows the mentioned instructions
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For
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instance there
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instance, there
 are many countries that have achieved great results after imposing legalization of measures related environmental issues
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shown
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showing
 that fear from penalties can result in revolutionary outcomes
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and preserve safe surroundings for everyone and every creature. In conclusion
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 treatment of environmental issues should be prioritized over any other issues
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 I am convinced that the case of environmental protection should include many parties to be done efficiently. I recommend that media and public figures ought to engage their efforts toward environmentally related issues like that I mentioned previously.
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