Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to improve such situations Discuss both views and give your opinion

Now a day, Student is doing better prepared to get
the good
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the best
college because the aim of good colleges to give the knowledgeable and quality student. I believe that knowledge is important to get
better job
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a better job
with it should helpful for the
society
.
To begin
with, Colleges are responsible for to create a future of students. They should teach as
society
perspective like
involve
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to involve
social work in
education
, learn respect and value of
education
with some extra activities in college. These activities should be an assignment so student will take seriously. Starting students think as task but after some time they used to it and that
involves
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is involved
in their nature with studies. To continue with, when I started my college there was some social activity we need to do that was a part of
assignment
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the assignment
an assignment
. I need to teach the rural area students that I have to do at least one month. Starting
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
felt bit
lazy but
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lazy, but
after
sometime
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some time
I used to it and started as my part of life. I learn with
this
activity how to value each other, respect. I believe
education
is
important but
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important, but
with that we have to learn to help our
society
. To conclude
this
, Every student should take part
for
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in
society
benefits with the
education
. Most of the people complete their
education
and
then
join good job to their survival and enjoy their comfort. I believe they should start thinking about the
society
with
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to
work.
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