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Some people think that having poeple from different nationalities and cultural backgrounds living together in the same country makes the country develop faster. Do you agree?

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trongly
with strength or in a strong manner
strongly
 agree that both the genders should be equally responsible for the
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house hold
a social unit living together
household
 chaos, as nowadays economy has dramatically
chnaged
made or become different in nature or form
changed
 for both couples have
neen
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
 equally given rights in education and occupations,
therefore
Linking Words
beingemployed
Suggestion
being employed
 and doing
house
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 works can be hectic
,
Accept space
,
as
this
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 is no easy job for a lady only
,
Accept space
,
in comparison while sharing the
house
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 jobs and sharing the tasks can be much easier and can be lived in much tension
envirnment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
.
Accept space
.
compared
Suggestion
Compared
 to the past generation where males and females used to do outside work and females inside
house
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 works, as it was
belived
accept as true; take to be true
believed
 that
mens
the force of workers available
men
means
mines
 were the bread winner of the family and
ladies
Suggestion
the ladies
 were living in a restriction world and dint have the ability to show their talents.
in
Suggestion
In
 conclusion
,
Accept space
,
therefore
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 it is very essential for both the
gendersto
Suggestion
genders to
 work
to gether
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
 as a
teamand
Suggestion
team and
 working
outthings
Suggestion
out things
 in
much
Suggestion
many
 effective ways in life in order to live a stress free life.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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