Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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have
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of
education system
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the education system
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believe
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for them and for the society. However others
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However, others
instead
of talent, improvement should be considered as key aspect
for Suggestion
a key aspect
the key aspect
key aspects
reward
. I intend to delve supporting arguments for both notion
in the following paragraph.
Rewarding talent is Suggestion
notions
traditional
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a traditional practice
practice
and which is the foundation of this
competitive era. Due to the competition that who comes first
, the world has received plethora
of scientists, doctors or many more professionals. Suggestion
a plethora
Firstly
, awarding based on most talented person
, it Suggestion
most talented people
the most talented person
provides pupils a
goal to reach. A Suggestion
provides pupils with a
student
who have
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has
goal
in the eye, is unstoppable and it can be most preferable Suggestion
a goal
goals
motive
to achieve better. Suggestion
motivated
Moreover
, after receiving reward
from one achievement will make an individual going for higher one. For an instance, a kid Suggestion
rewards
get
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gets
highest
marks in one subject and getting praised in front of class will make the same kid following Suggestion
high
practice
for other subjects as well.
However
, the above same practice
make
a Suggestion
makes
student
stressed and frustrated. It can lead to dangerous
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dangerous results
a dangerous result
the dangerous result
result
. Moreover
, everyone can not get high marks, there are always below expectation or
average students in the class. They are trying their best to get Accept comma addition
expectation, or
good but
they are not succeeding. Awarding based on performance growth can create huge psychological impact and provide them a perfect motive to thrive in Suggestion
better, but
better but
career
. Suggestion
a career
In addition
, this
practice
can add up to the confidence to student
who are on good scale
of performance improvement. For an example, getting Suggestion
the good scale
a good scale
reward
for proliferation in Suggestion
rewarded
result
will provide enough strength to Suggestion
the result
student
to perform well for highest marks.
To recapitulate, I believe both type
of Suggestion
types
reward
systems are important for educational career growth. I think primary education should focus on reward
based on improvement
which can create positive impact on Suggestion
improvements
students mind
to perform well in education and when they are ready, like higher study, the Suggestion
a student's mind
student's mind
the student's mind
student's minds
reward
based on academic
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the academic result
result
play
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plays
imperative role
to choose career opportunities or stand high in the competition.Suggestion
an imperative role
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