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Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment?

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Nowadays, television is one of the essential electronic devices in our houses. Talent shows consist of exciting shows on TV, which were attracted to a lot of viewers.
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 the purpose of finding talented ones, I think TV talent shows could
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 be entertaining.
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, each contestant wants to be evaluated by professional judges in the field.
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, there are often 3 or 4 judges with different backgrounds, typically they are singer, model, or
musician so
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musician, so
 the examinees will receive as much individual attention as possible. Another angle can be found after their talents were recognized, participants might become known. In the past, some of them were never known about. Take “American Idols” as an example, Carrie Underwood was nobody before she became the winner.
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, televised talent shows bring a lot of fun elements helping lookers to have happy moods and relaxing moments. The ridiculous performances of participants will make you laugh and surprising. Probably, there is
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 some truth in the idea that they attract viewers to gain a lot of money as much as the organizers can. The higher the ratings, the more people watch their shows, the more money they get from
advertisements
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the advertisements
. For that reason, I believe talent shows are
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entertainment
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entertained
entertaining
. In conclusion, these shows are a good method to look for people with natural abilities to sing, to dance, etc.
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, they could
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 be a really entertaining way to relax on our free time. So everyone should take easy with
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 problem, we just simply enjoy the shows.

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