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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. IELTS Writing Task 1

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. IELTS Writing Task 1
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The bar graph shows the trend of the
number
 of
people
 using what
number
 of social networking websites in
percentage
 in Canada. It is noted in the year 2014 and 2015 years. From the
graphs
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 it can be deduced that the
percentage
 of
people
 using any
one
 of the social networking
sites
 increased. There is a jump
of
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 value from the
percentage
 of
people
 using none of the
sites
 to
one
 of the
sites
, later there is a gradual decrease trend in the
number
 of
people
 using social networking
sites
 from
one
 site to all
the
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five
sites
.
On
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the
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contrast, it can be observed that the
percentage
 of usage of
number
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a number
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 of
sites
 more than
one
 increased from the previous year. In 2014 almost 1/3 of the total internet users used only
one
 website which dropped to almost ¼ of the total
people
 by 2015. There is an increase of about 1 to 5
percentage
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 from 2014 to 2015 who used more than
one
 website.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, percentage, one, sites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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