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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS
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The bar graph shows the trend of the
number
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people
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 using what
number
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 of social networking websites in
percentage
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 in Canada. It is noted in the year 2014 and 2015 years. From the
graphs
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 it can be deduced that the
percentage
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 of
people
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 using any
one
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 of the social networking
sites
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 increased. There is a jump
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 value from the
percentage
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 of
people
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 using none of the
sites
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 to
one
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 of the
sites
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, later there is a gradual decrease trend in the
number
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 of
people
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 using social networking
sites
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 from
one
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 site to all
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five
sites
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contrast, it can be observed that the
percentage
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 of usage of
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number
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a number
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 of
sites
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 more than
one
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 increased from the previous year. In 2014 almost 1/3 of the total internet users used only
one
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 website which dropped to almost ¼ of the total
people
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 by 2015. There is an increase of about 1 to 5
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percentage
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 from 2014 to 2015 who used more than
one
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 website.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, percentage, one, sites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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