Media is increasing in famous people who have ordinary background. Why do you think people interest in lives of famous people? Do you think this is a good why?

Media has become popular in
this
contemporary era and its interest has been
enrich
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enriched
enriching
among the famous
people
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person's
lifestyle. In my
opinion it’s
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opinion, it’s
has both negative and
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
effects.
However
, if media focus on their good
work
rather than
emphasing
impressive in appearance
imposing
emphasizing
emphasis
on their daily lifestyle
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update, it
will help individuals to learn more positive things.
This
essay will discuss why people are giving more important to know about the famous individual life and its positive
nd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
negative impacts on society. To commence with, due to the advance technology from media one can easily go through the history of famous pupil. Media is focusing
in
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on
living standard
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the living standard
of people
such
as celebrity who
work
in movie, sport player and
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
who are in higher post in
goverenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
offices. It’s helps one to know
what
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what's
going around the country and make people aware who is doing
better performance
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a better performance
for the country people.
Secondly
, it
also help
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has also helped
public to know why the people
is
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are
famous and what he did so it’s
motivate
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motivating
surrounding people as well.
For example
; in Nepal
kulaman
a line of units following one after another
column
claimant
is the famous man who is doing a great job to improve the electricity problem in the country.
Similarly
, in
Nepal Nepalese
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Nepal, Nepalese
hero and heroine
also
becoming famous in
media
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the media
as they are enhancing the movie sector by giving better performance.
However
, there are some negative impacts as well. If media focus more on negative things rather than positive it will directly make
bad impression
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a bad impression
among the people. Not only
this
, it’s
also hinder
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also hindering
in the privacy of those people as every time media will be standing
their
in or at that place
there
for news.
Secondly
, people have blind belief that whatever famous people
do
engage in
make
that true.
For instance
, some celebrity do advertisement on cosmetic product like cream shampoo and following that people spend
lot
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lots
of money on
shoping
searching for or buying goods or services
shopping
shipping
, it’s just
waste
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a waste
of money.
Hence
, it’s can be good in one hand if it’s motivating. To sum up, people interest is increasing due to their
work
and I think if
media
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the media
give interest only on their
work
rather than personal thing it will be better.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • intrigued
  • inspiration
  • achieveable
  • accessibility
  • platforms
  • relatable
  • escapism
  • glamorous
  • authenticity
  • unfiltered
  • fascination
  • unhealthy obsession
  • well-being
  • privacy
  • perpetuate
  • unrealistic expectations
  • culture of comparison
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