Write about the following topic: Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

Many people argue that someone’s success is attributable to

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instead

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of their own hard

work

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.

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, I totally disagree with

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opinion.

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I do believe that being successful requires

determination

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and huge effort.

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, Thomas Edison had continuously failed hundreds of times before inventing a variety of creations,

in

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of

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which the light bulb

is

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the most popular invention. Without his infinite patience and diligent

work

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, the scientist could not possess many different patents which remarkably influence our daily

life

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lives

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. Another case of success through

determination

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and

passion

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is Steve Job, who kept pursuing his dream despite being kicked out of his own company.

Passion

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and persistence led him to spend thousands of hours coding and experimenting to

finally

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create a new operating system which strongly/significantly

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the world of technology.

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,

passion

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,

determination

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, and hard

work

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are the key traits to succeed, which illustrates a greater importance than

luck

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.

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luck

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only makes a modest contribution to someone’s achievement. For the student who prays every night to pass the exam, there is very little chance for him to complete the test perfectly without any study or review. At least, the student has to study hard on some key issues and

luck

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does the

last

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if the question in

exam

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relates to what he has known.

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, in

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the lottery

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case, it is undeniable to say that

luck

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is purely the reason

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for turning

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one person

to

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into

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an overnight millionaire.

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/

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, the nearly zero

percent

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per cent

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of probability

to win

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a lottery clearly proves that

luck

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only comes by a small

chance

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change

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and cannot be the key point added to the success of everyone. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the idea that it’s all

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matter of

luck

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to succeed as there are other more important factors including

passion

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,

determination

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, and hard

work

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.