oday the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree with these views?

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Nowadays, there are lots of advertisements on television or on the streets. Some people think that the advertising boosts the sales of goods and it encourages people to buy things unnecessarily.
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may be true. In my country, many advertising companies produce advertisements with famous and popular actors or singers. People, especially youngsters, buy goods that their favourite singer
advertise
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advertises
,
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they do not really need the products.
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, on the television screen, a product may look gorgeous and good quality.
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of it, people often buy goods without enough consideration. Consumers may not actually need
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it, but
they buy goods impulsively soon after they watch the advertising.
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, as many customers buy a particular product due to its advertising campaign, the other people may be affected by the trend, even if the product is not
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about
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the real needs of the society.
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, there are various aspects against these arguments.
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, it is
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the people's choice
to make a decision to buy goods. Advertising may be not a cause of customers' buying habits. Individuals have their own spending habits. If they have got enough disposable Income
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the right to mane a decision’s given to them. No one actually can fudge whether the goods sold are the real needs of the society or not.
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, as there should be a limited amount of disposable income consumers are able to spend, people try to allocate their budgets. They cannot be simply swayed by those advertisements. In conclusion, as customers have their own strong opinions and standard of good quality goods, it’s better to leave them to make their own decision in
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buying
goods. It’s fairly difficult to say everyone’s swayed by advertising and buy
good
any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue
food
impulsively.
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, in
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the sensitive area
a sensitive area
sensitive areas
of businesses
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as toy industries, it may be necessary to band advertising to those children as children have not got enough ability to control themselves or to know what they need.
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