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Solving environmental problems should be the responsibility of international organisations rather than individual national government. Do you agree or disagree.

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It is believed that international
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 should be responsible for addressing environmental problems with no need of the contribution from individual governments.
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, I think that
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 statement does not apply to all cases. I believe that environmental hazards with global impacts should be solved by both international
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 and individual country’s government
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 In order to eradicate
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 dangerous risks, every individual and organisation should adopt environmentally friendly behaviours and theirs should be regulated according to standardized regulations. Legislating and implementing
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 guidelines are widely thought to be the responsibility of international
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, who can ensure
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 rules are fair and suitable
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 most countries.
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, supervising every citizen’s specific behaviour and imposing punishment are beyond the scope of international
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 requesting the contribution from every government.
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, if an environmental problem only affects one country, it is not worth of international
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organisation's
 contribution. The main reason is that their resources are limited and there are a variety of global issues requiring their attention.
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, their priority should be directed on / be given to problems that cause the most devastating impacts and affect significant numbers of people. Another reason is that individual governments are equipped with better knowledge and skills to tackle environmental problems locally
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 they have more insight about local geographical features, cultures and climates so that they can investigate the causes of a problem more efficiently. As discussed above, since international
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 do not have sufficient resources to address all problems worldwide, they should only pay attention to globalised environmental issues
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 as global warming, while encouraging individual government to deal with local environmental threats.
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