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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows how
water
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 is used to generate electricity in a hydroelectric power station.
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, the use of
water
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 is different during the
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day
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daytime
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time
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 and the
night
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nighttime
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time
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.
Water
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 from the river is blocked by a dam and stored in a high-level
reservoir
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. At the bottom of the dam, the intake is opened during the
day
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while
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 it is
being
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closed at night. In the
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day
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daytime
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time
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, once the intake is opened, the
water
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 flows into a tunnel and goes down to the power station. The force of the falling
water
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 makes the turbines
spinning
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, activating the generator
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 the
water
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 keeps going to a
lower level
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lower-level
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reservoir
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.
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, the electricity generated is transmitted to the national grid via power lines. In the night
time
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,
water
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 from the lower level
reservoir
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 flows back into the turbines
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 pumped to flow the
water
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 back into the high-level
reservoir
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 through the same tunnel that
water
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 flows in the
day
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time
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, day, time, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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