It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

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It is anticipated that in the coming years there will be a higher ratio of senior citizens in comparison to that of

younger one’s

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the younger one’s

in various nations around the globe.

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essay agrees that due to single

child

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child's

parent or unmarried individual will lead to increase the number of old people in a country.

Firstly

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, we will discuss

reason

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the reasons

reasons

behind their increasing

population

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Secondly

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, we will discuss about the positive outcomes that a country can

provide to most of

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provide most of

the elderly individuals.

First

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of all, the main reason behind the increasing number of

old

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older

individual’s is that, as most of the country’s are developing at a high pace resulting

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better infrastructure and

medicial

relating to the study or practice of medicine

medical

facilities turns out to be the long

living

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lives

of older people. In the recent

obversation

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, it has been noted that in India around 70% of

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population

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the population

consist of senior citizens which are able to get the proper health related facilities and accurate

medifications

the act of making something different (as e.g. the size of a garment)

modifications

which result into their increasing life’s.

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, the concepts like lone parent, adopting a child, unmarried individual

also

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tends to increase the

population

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of old people as there will be no future successors or the one who can have their name. Nearly 30% of the

population

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are not married which is a true example that in

near future

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the near future

the number of

old

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older

people will increase as there will be no younger one’s behind them. In conclusion, I agree that in the

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few decades the amount of

elder

advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

older

people is going to be at its peak than that of the younger one’s.

Mon Aug 26 2019

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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259 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

aging population
proportion
mentorship
strain
public healthcare systems
pension schemes
workforce
economic growth
automation
consumption patterns
intergenerational solidarity
sustainable living
environmental conservation

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