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Question: Universities should accept equal number of males and females in every subject. To what extent do you agree?

#universities #males #females
There is a huge controversy going on in recent days about Feminism and females should be taken into every subject as equal to men and actually more than males. Well, I completely disagree with the statement mentioned above and let's discuss some of the reasons. -
Firstly
, there should be no
gender
descrimination
unfair treatment of a person or group on the basis of prejudice
discrimination
 either it is female or a male. I think universities should consider all students equally and accept their applications according to their qualifications and percentages.
However
, we
can not
can not
cannot
 spoil the lives of
students
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students'
student's
student
 education based on
gender
, caste and creed. According to recent surveys, males scored higher marks than females.
However
,
media
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the media
has dominated
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have dominated
 some issues and raised the Feminism topic and debate to take many females into consideration to get into top colleges. Is
this
 a valid reason to take decisions depending on
gender
?
Definetely
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Definitely
 not. It is unethical. "All are equal" the same way "All students are equal". -
Secondly
, many students are struggling to get accepted into top universities and making the path for the better future. I believe students should be treated equally and of course, females should be encouraged by management to involve in all subjects and debate for themselves and can get any jobs regardless of what they are.
universities
Suggestion
Universities
 should take some decisions about students studying to get scholarships from the Government and to build their self-esteem creating a better society.
Last
 but not least, I completely disagree
to
Suggestion
with
 the aforementioned and there should be refining university rules to believe all students should be given their own recognition, importance and acceptance regardless of
gender
.
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