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Some people feel that multinational companies improve life in the foreign countries where they sell their goods and services. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Thanks to globalisation, companies now find it easy to set up branches all over the world.
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 some feel that multinational companies have had a positive impact on the countries in which they operate, I believe they actually harmed them in three ways.
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, multinational companies often dominate local markets at the expense of local businesses. While I concede that global businesses often produce goods
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with
 a high quality, they
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 take advantage of economies of scale to produce these items cheaply.
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, local companies can't compete, and go out of business trying to do so. A good illustration of
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 is supermarkets, with large multinationals often squeezing the profit margins of small corner shops to
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 an extent that most have gone bankrupt. Employment is another area of concern. Many supporters of multinational companies claim that they provide thousands of jobs worldwide. While
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 may be true to some extent, I would argue that when global corporations move their operations to another country, they generally only offer low-paid work. In fact, very often
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 companies build factories in less developed areas so that they can lower labour costs, keeping only
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the most highly
the highest
the higher
 paid corporate jobs back in their home country. The final area which multinational companies have a negative effect on is
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a culture
the culture
. When multinational companies enter a foreign market, they tend to dilute local customs and traditions. Take McDonalds
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. The fact that it operates in so many countries means that many people outside America are eating fast food at the expense of their own local cuisine. With the same products and goods on offer in every society, the world is becoming more and more homogenised.

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