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Some people think children’s spending time on TV, video and PC games is good, while others think it is bad. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, children have more and more kinds of entertainment from outdoor to indoor. Most of them like spending
time
 on
TV
, video and
PC
 games rather than participating in outside activities. In my opinion, parents should allow their children to use these devices for learning and
entertainment but
Accept comma addition
entertainment, but
 they must control the amount of
time
 their children use.
To begin
 with, we are coming to a global society where people can improve knowledge through television or personal computer.
Instead
 of going to school, children can learn at home by watching education channels on television or searching information on the internet.
Besides
, if
surrounding area
Suggestion
the surrounding area
 is too complicated and parents do not have
time
 to watch out their naughty kids, they must find a watcher to keep children from danger which can happen at
anytime
Suggestion
any time
.
TV
, video and
PC
 games are the best devices to complete
mission
Suggestion
the mission
a mission
 with the least price.
On the contrary
, spending too much
time
 on
TV
 or
PC
 has some disadvantages for health not only physically but
also
 mentally. The people who often watch screen more than eight hours per day can be easily acquired eye diseases
such
 as myopia or
amblyopia
. Sitting before the
TV
 or
PC
 every day and having nobody to talk to, children
also
 lack social communication skills. It makes them feel uncomfortable and
unconfident
 when dealing with others.
In addition
, if children spend too much
time
 on
TV
 or
Pc
Suggestion
PC
, they don’t have enough
time
 to study and do exercises.
As a result
, these kids cannot get
high
Suggestion
higher
 score and cannot achieve success in learning. In conclusion,
TV
, video and
PC
 games have a few advantages in relaxing and
learning but
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learning, but
 parents need to control the
time
 that children spend on them. When they
are taken
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are taking
have taken
take
 good advantage of, especially for educational purposes, they can be very useful for the parents who can’t spare much
time
 for their children.
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