In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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One of the most challenging problems of today’s
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is the question who should be responsible for our old people. It’s not only a financial
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a question of the system we want our
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to have. In my essay I would like to consider different models.
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, the company can be responsible for their retired employees. For
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reason a special fund could be established. The advantage of
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is, if you believe in the capitalist system, that it should be the cheapest
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. A possible
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is that the companies might have competition disadvantage due to higher staff costs. A
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is that the government has to have the responsibility for the old people’s
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with its tax incomes. Actually,
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is the most democratic
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since everybody gets as much money as he or she needs. Unfortunately, as the present situation in our
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shows,
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seems not to work very well. The government can no longer afford
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is to give
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the responsibility to the individual that means that everybody has to save money during their working life for the time after their retirement.
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because there will certainly exist people who can’t afford to save part of their salary. In
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case the government would have to save for them. A
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is to go back to the old
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of “the big family” who cares for all their members. I don’t think
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because the family structures have so much changed. To sum up, I have to admit that I can’t find a
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for
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all models have advantages and disadvantages. Certainly we have to think about
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topic much more in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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