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Overall, from 1970 to 2000 the number of marriages of the American people were slightly dropped and the number of divorces was around a half of the number of marriages. When compare the marital status of adults in the USA in 1970 and 2000, the percentage of married and widowed were decreased, whereas the percentage of adults who never married and divorced were increased.

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The bar charts show the amount of marriages and divorces in the USA from 1970 to 2000, and the percentage of the marital
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 of adult Americans in 1970 and 2000. Overall, the number of marriages of the American people slightly dropped and the number of divorces was around a half of the number of marriages. When comparing the marital
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 of adult in the USA in 1970 and 2000, the percentage of married and widowed were decreasing, whereas the percentage of adults who never married and divorced were increasing. In the
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 chart, the amount of people who were marriages in 1970 and 1980 were staying constant at 2.5
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 people, after that it slightly dropped to 2
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 people in 2000. The amount of divorces started at 1
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 people in 1970 and it increased to nearly 1.5
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 people in 1980,
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 it slightly dropped to 1
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 people in 2000. In the
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 chart, when comparing the proportion of marital
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 in 1970 and 2000. The married
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 was falling from 70% to nearly 60% and the widowed
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 was decreasing around 1%.
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, the never married
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 and the divorced
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 were increasing from around 15% to 20% and from around 2% to nearly 10% respectively.

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