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The bar charts show the amount of marriages and divorces in the USA from 1970 to 2000, and the percentage of the marital status of adult Americans in 1970 and 2000.

The bar charts show the amount of marriages and divorces in the USA from 1970 to 2000, and the percentage of the marital status of adult Americans in 1970 and 2000.
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The bar charts show the
amount
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number
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 of
marriages
 and divorces in the USA from 1970 to 2000, and the percentage of the marital status of adult Americans in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
, the number of
marriages
 slightly dropped and the number of divorces was around
a
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apply
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half of the number of
marriages
. When comparing the marital status in 1970 and 2000, the percentage of married and widowed were decreasing,
whereas
 the percentage of the never married and divorced were increasing. The
amount
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number
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 of
people
 who were
marriages
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married
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 in 1970 and 1980
were
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was
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 staying constant at 2.5
million
people
, after that it slightly dropped to 2
million
people
 in 2000. The
amount
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number
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 of divorces started at 1
million
people
 in 1970 and it increased to nearly 1.5
million
people
 in 1980, and
then
 it slightly dropped to 1
million
people
 in 2000. When comparing the proportion of marital status in 1970 and 2000. The
married
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number of married
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 fallen from 70% to nearly 60% and the
widowed
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number of widowed
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 was decreasing
around
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by around
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 1%.
On the other hand
, the never married and the divorced increased from around 15% to 20% and from around 2% to nearly 10% respectively.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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