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Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give opinion.

#people #growth #hunger #poverty #environment
One of the most
conspisuous
obvious to the eye or mind
conspicuous
 trends in today's modern world that interest quite and
lot
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a lot
 of people and
in
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of
controvery
a contentious speech act; a dispute where there is strong disagreement
controversy
is
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are
economical
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economic
growth
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grown
growing
. It is
belived
accept as true; take to be true
believed
 by some that hunger and poverty can be eradicated by economic
growth
 only,
however
, I
deffer
be different
differ
differed
differs
 from them and agree with the statement
thay
pointing out something
that
 suggests
thatthis
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that this
growth
 is the major cause to harm our environment. To embark on, supporters of economical
growth
 have innumerable arguments to support their point of
view but
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view, but
 main reason
steamming
the territory occupied by one of the constituent administrative districts of a nation
stating
 the fact is the monetary
growth
 of society.
In other words
 the more
economi
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the economy
economy
economies
economic
 will grow the more people will be wealthy and it will help society to curb the issue related to basic needs
such
 and food,
shulters
a structure that provides privacy and protection from danger
shelters
 and cloths. To
jistufy
show to be reasonable or provide adequate ground for
justify
, I would quote the example of developed countries, they are growing
economical
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economically
 rapidly and most of the basic issues have been addressed there. It is shown by facts that
this
 is responsible for over-all
growth
 of any nation. On the other side,
peopls
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 who oppose
this
growth
 and says
that is
 detrimental
for
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to
eco system
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Eco system
ecosystem
 have evident proofs to support their school of
though
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
thought
.
First
 and
formost
ranking above all others
foremost
 is the industrial revolution. To illustrate, for the
growth
 in
econimy goverments
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economy, governments
economy goverments
economy governments
econimy governments
encourag
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encourages
encourage
encouraged
 industries and promote massive production of goods which leads to more consumption of natural resources
such
 as water,
fossile
of or concerning the face
facial
 oils and
oxyzen
a nonmetallic bivalent element that is normally a colorless odorless tasteless nonflammable diatomic gas; constitutes 21 percent of the atmosphere by volume; the most abundant element in the earth's crust
oxygen
.
Secondly
, these industries need space for
expension
the act of increasing (something) in size or volume or quantity or scope
expansion
expression
extension
 and setting up new manufacturing units which is the main cause of
deforstation
the state of being clear of trees
deforestation
.
For instance
, over 40000
sqkms
a fraudulent business scheme
scams
 area has been covered by industries in Delhi/NCR.
What
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What's
 more, never ending
desired
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desire
by
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of
corporates
of or belonging to a corporation
corporate
prefer
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prefers
 machines rather than manpower to work in their plants which leads to the unemployment.
Evantually
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Eventually
, economical
growth
 has more damage
on
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to
invironment
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the environment
environment
. To recapitulate, I reiterate my assertion,
however
 a large groups society
recon
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Recon
economical
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economic
growth
 one of the
adviseable
worthy of being recommended or suggested; prudent or wise
advisable
 panaceas to address the issue related to
povery
the state of having little or no money and few or no material possessions
poverty
 and hunger, I believe that it has more adverse effects that are not
reversable
capable of reversing or being reversed
reversible
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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