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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

#salary #job #satisfaction
It is often argued that it is more advantageous to choose a
work
 with high wage, even if it doesn't appeal to you at all. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and think that
job
satisfaction
 is much more important than
salary
.
First
 of all, I believe that
satisfactory
Suggestion
satisfying
work
 gives people a sense of fulfilment that no money can guarantee. Even if someone is earning a high
salary
, but feels tensed and compromises with his conscience,
this
 person won’t enjoy his life. While pursuing one’s interests will always bring pleasure and
feeling
Suggestion
a feeling
 of
satisfaction
.
For example
, a lot of famous researchers made their career
choices not
Accept comma addition
choices, not
 because of appealing wages, but because they were passionate about science. That’s why it’s more important to choose the kind of
work
 that makes you happier than to look only at a high
salary
.
Secondly
, doing what you like keeps you motivated and
therefore
 leads to a career growth.
In other words
, there is a strong relation between
job
satisfaction
 and productivity. People who love their jobs can easily excel in their fields of
work
 and achieve better results than those, who
put
Suggestion
put a salary
salary
on
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in
 the
first
 place.
For instance
, Henry Miller decided to leave his everyday
job
 despite a good wage and ventured to become a writer. And after enduring years of ups and downs he became one of the most famous and well-paid authors of the twentieth century.
Thus
, advantages of jobs that keep you satisfied outweigh the drawback of a low
salary
 in a long-term perspective. To conclude, I strongly believe that
job
satisfaction
 is more beneficial than high
salary
 because it makes people happy and motivated.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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