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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree?

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Cars have become an integral part of the modern life. The dependency on cars is increasing
day
 by
day
 and
this
 is leading to many problems. Various measures are being taken to tackle
this
 situation. As one of the control measures, many cities have proposed to ban private vehicles from the city centre. At the outset,
this
 decision seems to be right and has many advantages.
First
, it would ease the traffic congestion around the city centre, thereby allowing the free movement of people who come for shopping.
Further
,
this
 would encourage more and more people
to use
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use
 the public transport system.
This
 would eventually result to save valuable resource like fuel.
However
, I tend to disagree with the decision. While we can have free flow of people
movement
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moving
, it would cause problems
to
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for
 people who come for shopping and walk back with heavy bags. As we would
dependent
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depend
 on the public transport timings, we would not be able to shop at our convenience, which is very essential in our
day
 to
day
 life.
Finally
, while I do not agree with a complete ban on private vehicles, a decision by which private cars shall not be
allowed only
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allowed, only
 during peak hours is something that would help to ease the situation.
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