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Modern societies need specialists in certain fields, but not others. Some people, therefore, think that governments should pay university fees for students who study subjects that are needed by society. Those who choose to study less relevent subjects should not receive the government funding Would the advantages of such an educational policy outweigh the disadvantage

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wadays
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Weekdays
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Wadays
 governments offer financial support for certain amount of students in specific areas of education.
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, it rises a discussion about choosing the most suitable students, precisely, some people claim that a country can get better results if
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 funding will be given
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to
 the students who are
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taught
 according to the demands of the modern life.
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, others insist on sharing government support among the students equally. In my opinion, it will be honest to give
students financial
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students, financial
 support depending on their abilities, not only the study areas they chose, and I am going to explain my opinion with some facts below.
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, it is undeniable fact that technological development of the world changes the content of jobs. I mean in comparison with previous
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years, nowadays
 there are
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greater
 demands for people in innovative areas,
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 as computer engineering, or information technologies etc.
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, in our country the agricultural section was more likely to develop in the 1990s, so
government
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the government
 tried to provide necessary facilities and financial resources to qualify workers in
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sphere whereas
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sphere, whereas
 today specialists in the industrial and information fields are more important than the
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ones indicated
.
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, to my mind a number of disadvantages will be unavoidable if the government applies
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 policy, to be more precise, development only in certain fields may not result with the improvement of
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the whole economy
 of the country.
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, there may be
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a great amount
 of students with specific abilities in less relevant subjects and discrimination between
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 students will probably cause negative effects on education systems. In conclusion, taking account all indicated facts above I think following the idea given on the statement can be damage the education not improve it
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