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Eating too much of sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is the responsibility of government to limit people's sugar consumption while others think that it is an individual responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Healthy lifestyle is an important goal to achieve and maintain.
it
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It
 includes both healthy
diet
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 and exercises. In my opinion,
Mainitaining
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintaining
 healthy dietary habits is a
responsability
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 of both individuals and
governements
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
. Both must
participiate
share in something
participate
 and help. Avoiding sugar is an important aspect of having healthy
food
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. Studies have found that having healthy
diet
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 can prevent many diseases. People who consume high amount of sugar are prone to obesity, cardiovascular diseases
in addition
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 to many types of cancer including colon cancer.
Indvidulas
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 must be aware of the importance of
healthy life style
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a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyle
. In order to cultivate our health.
Education level
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The education level
 of the individual has
impact
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impacted
 on his lifestyle. Highly educated people would be strict
to
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with
healthy
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a healthy diet
diet
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. They have knowledge about diseases can be resulted from having junk
food
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. Sugar-rich
food
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 is a harmful habit. Children are at particular risk. With the increase of fast
food
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 chains
,
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,
 Children and teenagers obesity noted to be increased as well.
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, governments
has
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have
important role
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an important role
important roles
 to do in
this
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 regard, Media can be used to increase the
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
 of people. Instructing people
to have
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have
 healthy
food
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 and avoid junk one. Providing
hopsitals
a health facility where patients receive treatment
hospitals
 with professional
dietations
a voluntary gift (as of money or service or ideas) made to some worthwhile cause
donations
deductions
dietitians
 that help people and warn them about
cosequances
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the consequences
consequences
consequence
 of having
execessive
beyond normal limits
excessive
 carbohydrates. Making
compaigns
a race between candidates for elective office
campaigns
campaign
 will
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
 people more.
For example
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.
Marthawns
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Marathons
Martens
 and
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
compagin
a race between candidates for elective office
campaign
campaigning
 for obesity will be beneficial.
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,
govenements
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 can help by forcing
resturant
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
restaurant
 to mention calories in each meal.
This
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 will limit the consumption of high
calories
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calorie
food
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. In conclusion,
mainitaining
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintaining
healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
 and
diet
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 is
responsibilty
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responsible
responsibility
responsibilities
responsibly
 for both
individulas
a human being
individuals
individual
 and
governements
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
. Both must
participiate
share in something
participate
participant
 to achieve
this
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 goal in order to have great healthy community.
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