Eating too much of sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is the responsibility of government to limit people's sugar consumption while others think that it is an individual responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Healthy lifestyle is an important goal to achieve and maintain.
it
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It
includes both healthy
diet
and exercises. In my opinion,
Mainitaining
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintaining
healthy dietary habits is a
responsability
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
of both individuals and
governements
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
. Both must
participiate
share in something
participate
and help. Avoiding sugar is an important aspect of having healthy
food
. Studies have found that having healthy
diet
can prevent many diseases. People who consume high amount of sugar are prone to obesity, cardiovascular diseases
in addition
to many types of cancer including colon cancer.
Indvidulas
must be aware of the importance of
healthy life style
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a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyle
. In order to cultivate our health.
Education level
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The education level
of the individual has
impact
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impacted
on his lifestyle. Highly educated people would be strict
to
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with
healthy
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a healthy diet
diet
. They have knowledge about diseases can be resulted from having junk
food
. Sugar-rich
food
is a harmful habit. Children are at particular risk. With the increase of fast
food
chains
,
Accept space
,
Children and teenagers obesity noted to be increased as well.
However
, governments
has
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have
important role
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an important role
important roles
to do in
this
regard, Media can be used to increase the
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
of people. Instructing people
to have
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have
healthy
food
and avoid junk one. Providing
hopsitals
a health facility where patients receive treatment
hospitals
with professional
dietations
a voluntary gift (as of money or service or ideas) made to some worthwhile cause
donations
deductions
dietitians
that help people and warn them about
cosequances
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the consequences
consequences
consequence
of having
execessive
beyond normal limits
excessive
carbohydrates. Making
compaigns
a race between candidates for elective office
campaigns
campaign
will
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
people more.
For example
.
Marthawns
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Marathons
Martens
and
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
compagin
a race between candidates for elective office
campaign
campaigning
for obesity will be beneficial.
Furthermore
,
govenements
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
can help by forcing
resturant
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
restaurant
to mention calories in each meal.
This
will limit the consumption of high
calories
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calorie
food
. In conclusion,
mainitaining
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintaining
healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
and
diet
is
responsibilty
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responsible
responsibility
responsibilities
responsibly
for both
individulas
a human being
individuals
individual
and
governements
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
. Both must
participiate
share in something
participate
participant
to achieve
this
goal in order to have great healthy community.
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