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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students.

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There is no denying that computers and technology are leading the world,
hence
, they should be used in any education process.
Nevertheless
, they could be used in the wrong way and cause a serious damage. In my opinion, technology should definitely be implemented in class learning with a control and balance. On the one hand, using technology can provide different advantages to any educational process, among them: saving time for students and teachers as the information is easily accessible, providing students with different tools
such
 as games and interactions to make the process more enjoyable and fun, avoiding any information loss as everything can be saved in the cloud and
also
 can help to save the environment as there is not paper use.
On the other hand
, education is not only about providing technical knowledge, it is
also
 important to teach values and manners and
this
 can only be taught by human teachers.
Therefore
, to have an integrated In conclusion, Technology can be very helpful when talking about technical knowledge,
however
, traditional education given by educators should be used as well. In my opinion, the best way to educate and shape professionals is integrating both methods, creating a balance between strong knowledge and students able to tackle with any daily situation.
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