Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Bad situation happens every day in today’s society. Some people believe we should just accept it.

However

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, others approve that only giving an effective solution can truly make things better. From my perspective, I agree with the

second

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view. Generally accepting the bad fact will lead to a worse future. Globally thinking, almost every region suffers problem no matter the developed countries or the developing countries.

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, the trend of aging population increases the financial burden in some high-welfare countries,

such

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as Japan and Iceland. Meanwhile, in North Africa, a lot of people are

died

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dying

of hunger and bad medical conditions. Many governments regard these issues as a normal social phenomenon. Few of them are willing to make realistic practice,

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as macroeconomic regulation or financial aid.

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the situation

get

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gets

worse and worse.

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active actions

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active, actions

to solve any kinds of social issues can bring light back to society again. Take China’s reform and open

for example

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, it promoted China to become a modern and high-speed growing country after suffering

panic

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a panic

for 10 years. The key point was to break the old rules for business. Deng’s government revised the set for external trade, which appealed quantities of capital and technologies.

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, after nearly 30

years’

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years

working, China has occupied the

second

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largest economy, with

achievement

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the achievement

of life quality and

culture

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cultural

diversity. In short, when government and society are faced with problems, doing something changeable appears more beneficial. Individually, as a citizen, I will not approve the

government which

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government, which

not only neglects terrible

things but

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things, but

also

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breaks the promises to a nation’s people.

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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ambition
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