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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that it is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In these days,
serveral
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
 languages become extinct every year. A study has found that almost a
language
 dies out every day. There has been a lot discussion about
this
 issue. Some people think that it is not important and they even think that it will become better because our living will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.
However
, I take an opposite stance
to
Suggestion
on
this
. There are numerous causes that account for my standpoint and I will list them as follows. Undoubtedly, if there are fewer languages in the world,
this
 will facilitate our
communications
Suggestion
communication
 as we can understand the ideas of people more easily if we speak the same
language
.
For example
, we can understand the news from other countries more thoroughly if they are using the same
language
.
Moreover
, a fast growing market can
also
 be formed if thousands of languages are given up and only speak a globalised media's chosen
language
. On the face of it, it seems that allowing languages to be extinct can bring advantages to the society,
however
, the value that needs to be forgone are much higher.
Firstly
,
language
 extinction will destroy the cultural diversity. A
language
 represents the culture of a region and is the irreplaceable part of the heritage of the human race. By studying a
language
, we can see things from a different cultural perspective and understand the culture of a human race better.
For example
, by studying Japanese, we can learn that it is uncommon for Japanese to say NO directly and
hence
 we can know that rejecting
invitation
Suggestion
the invitation
an invitation
invitations
 directly is uncommon for Japanese. If a
language
 is allowed to be extinct, it will pose an irretrievable academic
loss
. These losses will definitely outweigh the advantages being brought.
Secondly
,
language
 extinction will
also
 pose economic
loss
 to the society. It is because if a
language
extincts
no longer in existence; lost or especially having died out leaving no living representatives
extinct
, some linguists, anthropologists will lose rich sources of materials documenting the people's history. The linguists and anthropologists may even be forced to terminate their research and become unemployed. Losing rich sources of materials and possible unemployment of linguists and anthropologists will definitely pose economic
loss
 to the society. To conclude, I do not agree that life will be easier if there are few languages in the world as
extinction
Suggestion
the extinction
 of
langages
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
languages
language
 will pose both academic and economic
loss
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losses
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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