In the last 20 years, there have been significant developments in the field of information (IT) , for example the worldwide web and communication by email. However , future developments in IT are likely to have More negative effects than positive? To what extent do you agree with this view.

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As a result
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of advancement in
technology
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, there are changes in different aspects of
life
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.
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For
previous 20 years
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the previous 20 years
, IT sectors have gone through significant developments
,
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,
for example
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the
worldwide
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world wide
web and communication by email. Whereas, future developments in the field of
information
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technology
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are likely to create more problems than its benefits. I
am agree
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agree
have agreed
with
this
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view to
large extent
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a large extent
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To begin
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with
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,
developments in IT are accompanied with many negatives.
Firstly
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,
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,
in
this
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modern era
,
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,
people have become
digitalized
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and all their personal
information
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is in their mobile phones which can be result detrimental for them as within
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click other person can have
this
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information
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and can be misused.
For instance
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,
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,
if a their gets bank account details of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
person
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,
then
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individual
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the individual
an individual
individuals
can steal money
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.
Secondly
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,
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,
developments in
information
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results in
lack
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the lack
of privacy as there are lots of applications which
needs
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need
access to photos
,
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,
contact list and so on
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,
thus
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personal details can be a powerful weapon for bad person.
On the other hand
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,
technology
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has made
human
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the human life
life
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more convenient by making available all the
information
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as now one can have
information
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about any course
,
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,
recipe
,
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,
and so forth. Basically
,
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,
information
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technology
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has
provide
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provided
answers to questions
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,
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however increase
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however, increase
in crime rate is a consequence of development in IT sector because
lot
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a lot
of content is available on the web.
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Thus people
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Thus, people
by
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from
accessing the
information
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individual can commit crime. To conclude
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,
developments in IT sector
has made
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have made
human
life
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comfortable but
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comfortable, but
also
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results In lack of privacy and a danger to human
life
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.
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However
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,
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,
there should be
restriction
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a restriction
restrictions
on the use of
information
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