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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
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In
this
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 everyone needs money for the their survival and plays an indispensable role
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 After making money
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 organization have some social
duty
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 I personally believe that a
business
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 should pay attention towards social
responsibility
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To begin
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 enterprises have many
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responsibility
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responsibilities
 regarding
society
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 and they need to fulfil it because a
business
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 operates in a
society
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Besides
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this
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 a
business
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 gets resources from
society
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,
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thus
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it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
duty
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 of
a
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an
 organization to pay back to
society
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For instance
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 if
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an
enterprise
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 gets its raw material
from
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From
community
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 than a
company
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 will provide good quality product in return.
Secondly
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, if a
business
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perform
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performs
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
duty
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 very well
then
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 it will somehow
benefits
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benefit
 the entire
community
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 as well as
enterprise
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, because it will increase the sale
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,
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additionally reputation
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the additionally reputation
 of
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company
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the company
companies
 will become good.
On the other hand
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 sometime social
responsibility
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 creates loss for a
company
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 as when they organise a free health check up or give charity
etc
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its
 because all
this
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 money is withdrawn from
company
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's profit
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However
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,
company
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 by doing
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 social
responsibility
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 generates employment
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 so whenever a new
enterprise
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 starts it give job to numerous people. To conclude, it's a
duty
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company
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the company
 to fulfil
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 social
responsibility
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 as somehow it will benefit the organization as well as
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community
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the community
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Moreover
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it's better to perform their
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responsibility
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responsibilities
 because it will create ample opportunities not only for
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community
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the community
 but for
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enterprise
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the enterprise
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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