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Nowadays, many people have to work longer time and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?

#people #work #time #employers #life
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It is a fact that working
hours
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 are getting longer and
work
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 pressure is getting more intense at the workplace.There are
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 of reasons which have caused the problem and there couple of things that
employers
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 can do to help their staff.We will discuss it in detail in
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 paragraphs. For a number of reasons,working
hours
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 are becoming more hectic.
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due to
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 competition in
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the labour
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 market.As the supply of the labour is higher than the job market.It is been reported there are ten to fifteen average applications for
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the single
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 job opportunity.
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,
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 would choose
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 who have multiple talents,could
work
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 for longer
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na
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and
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can
 handle multiple tasks.
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,In most
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IT companies ,because of different time zones,
employees
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 have to extend their working
hours
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 to resolve the issue and support the application.
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 survey conducted in
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Japan shows that an average IT employee works for 12
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 per day.
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,owing to
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employees
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 have to
work
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 for more
hours
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 and it leads to stress. There are several things which
employers
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 can do to make the
situtaion
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situation
 better. It is believed that exercise could reduce stress
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.In order to promote it, organisations should open
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 and
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should
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 access to
employees
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 on all the days of
week
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the week
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.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,they should organise discussion sessions and should take
actions
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 to rectify the problems faced by
employees
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.It will give them
feelong
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feeling
 of
belongings
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. One more point which can be taken into consideration is that
employers
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 should hire unpaid interns to help
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employees
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 ,
this
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work
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 pressure and it will
also
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 opportunity for interns.
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 situation for the firm and interns. In conclusion,
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higher
 competition in the job market and globalisation are
main
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 reasons for the stress at
workplace
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the workplace
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 and
employess
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employees
employers
 have a lot to
contibute
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contribute
 to improve the situation.A
healty
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healthy
 workplace is very crucial for the best performance of
emplyees
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employees
.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comfortable lifestyle
  • make ends meet
  • culture of 'presenteeism'
  • job insecurity
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • globalization
  • irregular work hours
  • flexible working schedules
  • work-life balance
  • employee training and development
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • healthier work environment
  • mental health resources
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