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Some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea, while others disagree strongly. Consider both sides of this debate and present your own opinion. You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Now a days many students are taking leisure
time
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 between school and university due to improving the knowledge and experience
on
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in
 the field and many people are
recommended
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recommending
this
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 but same
time
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 other people
are not recommned
Suggestion
are not recommending
are not recommend
have not recommended
are not recommended
don't recommend
do not recommend
this
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 due to it's
impacting
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impact
 on their
future
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 carrier. In
this
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 essay I will argue
gap
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 year is best
between
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among
highschool
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high school
 and college to improve the skills.
Firstly
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, Now a days many young
kids are intersted to
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kids are interested
kids are interested to
kids are entrusted to
 take
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gap
Suggestion
a gap
the gap
 between studies due to they have to know the current and
future
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 market trend
hence
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 they can observe the globalization things and it's worth for
future
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 learning skills rather than to continue legacy methodology
.
Accept space
.
Secondaly
Suggestion
Secondly
, due to break on
studies many
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studies, many
 university students are
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
entrusted
 to work in aboard
hence
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 they will learn new things easily and same
time
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 they can know the value of money
therefore
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 it's very useful in the carrier and plan the life balancing. For
Examaple
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Example
 in USA, Chicago university is very much
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
 to take new students with
gap
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 year because they have very good analyse skills and they don't
required
Suggestion
require
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
therefore
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 automatically saving the
univeristy
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
 money.
On the other hand
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, some teachers
denayed
declare untrue; contradict
denied
 that students should not take any free
time
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 between studies due to they will
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 one year and others move forward, neither that many higher educations and companies are not taking for
future
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 education and jobs because they don't know what he/she did in the free
time
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. In Conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 have strongly
agree
Suggestion
agreed
 that students should take
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gap
Suggestion
the gap
a gap
 between higher educations
therefore
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 they can easily understand
gloabal
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
global
 market trend and same
time
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 they can build the confidence based on their work
experience
Suggestion
experience, hence
hence
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 they can build new startup companies and useful to the nation, rather to continue the course and no
future
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 plans.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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