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Some people think that children`s free time must include educational activities, otherwise they will waste their time. To what extend do you agree?

#people #children`s #time #activities #waste
Overall, fossil fuels will continue to significant
energy
 sources in the USA while natural and nuclear
power
 has been insignificant
energy
 sources. Petrol and oil are the most widely used as
energy
 sources in the USA and the
energy
 consumption of these fuels increased over the period given. It started at 35 quadrillion units (35Q) in 1980 and fluctuated in the
first
 two decades. From 2000, it has increased steadily and expected to reach around 47Q in 2030. The
energy
 consumption of coal and natural gas was an upward trend throughout the period. In 1980, it began at just over 15Q and 20Q respectively.
Then
, it both has increased gradually to about 25Q in 2015. The
energy
 consumption of coal will rise to about 30Q in 2030 while it will remain stable for natural gas.
Energy
 from nuclear, solar
/
wind
 and
hydropower
 started at around 4Q in 1980.
Then
, nuclear and solar
/
wind
power
 has risen by around 3Q and 2Q respectively. Consumption of
energy
 from
hydropower
 has fluctuated until 2010, and it will level out at around 4Q after that.
Energy
 from nuclear, solar
/
wind
 and
hydropower
 started at around 4Q in 1980.
Then
, nuclear and solar
/
wind
power
 has risen by around 3Q and 2Q respectively. Consumption of
energy
 from
hydropower
 has fluctuated until 2010, and it will level out at around 4Q after that.
Energy
 from nuclear, solar
/
wind
 and
hydropower
 started at around 4Q in 1980.
Then
, nuclear and solar
/
wind
power
 has risen by around 3Q and 2Q respectively. Consumption of
energy
 from
hydropower
 has fluctuated until 2010, and it will level out at around 4Q after that.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • well-rounded
  • burnout
  • informal learning
  • creativity
  • problem-solving
  • over-scheduled
  • self-discovery
  • independence
  • caregivers
  • structured activities
  • educational agendas
  • childhood simplicity
  • academic outcomes
  • professional outcomes
  • leisure time
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