Some people feel that entertainers ( e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

Many believe personnel associated with entertainment industry are being paid extensively. I concur with
this
point of view, because most of these celebrities enjoy luxurious lifestyle, in comparison to those who serve the community. On one hand, if one has to guess anyone's worth, they should take a look at their living standard.
Hence
, whenever a Hollywood or sports celebrities' name comes up, we visualize a mansion with many exotic sports cars.
This
is because, most of them often, get paid ridiculously for a single event or a movie.
Therefore
, many youngsters, these days fantasize to become like them someday.
On the other hand
;
however
, if we take a look at professionals like doctors, engineers and teachers, we would observe that most of them belong to the middle class group of people in our country.
For example
, a median pay of a school teacher in U.S is around $40K,
as a result
, there is an extreme shortage of competent teachers.
Although
there are some well-known successful professionals, they
also
do not get as monetary benefits as famous celebrities do. In conclusion, if
this
wage-gap difference between well-known stars and proficient professionals continue, soon a dis-balance would emerge in society because most people would try to become famous rather than becoming competent in studies.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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