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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that smoking in public places is presently prohibited in certain countries. A number of individuals say that
such
 a rule is reasonable.
This
 essay
is completely agreed
Suggestion
completely agrees
 with that statement because
this
 action reduces the number of new smokers and less chances of getting infected by smokers. Out of all the arguments the strongest one to support my side is that the new smokers are less likely to smoke.
This
 is to say that they are mostly teenagers and young adults and usually copy other smokers to show the maturity
level but
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level, but
 by banning public smoking, there are fewer chances to get in contact with them and
this
 will help to not get addicted to smoking. A typical example of
this
 is that according to survey in India, 60% reduction in the number of smokers after a ban in public areas. The other reason to prove my point is that the numbers of passive smokers have been drastically reduced and
this
 means that fewer people get affected by smoking. If smokers do not smoke in public area, the people are not contaminated by the fumes of smoking, which has detrimental effects on our body may cause dangerous diseases
such
 as cancer, Asthma. A typical reference for
this
 is that my uncle had passed away because of cancer, even he never smoked a cigarette in his life. To conclude the essay, it can be
finally
 commented that smoking in the public zone is illegal in numerous countries and I personally believe that
this
 rule of the government far more valuable for all the citizens of the Nations because it reduces the numbers new
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 in smoking habits and risk of getting affected by the active smokers.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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