some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People's opinion
differ
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differs
as to whether economic growth help to reduce the poverty or it would
contaminates
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contaminate
our
environment
system. While there are some strong arguments
with
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to
the former view, but I believe that it
effect
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affects
affect
our ecosystem in many ways. On the one hand, there are several reasons why people think that
rise
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a rise
in
economy
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the economy
will remove their poverty and
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their basic needs.
Firstly
, to grow up the economy countries invest their money to open the new industries, and
as a result
, there would be new job opportunities for
unemployed person
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unemployed people
unemployed persons
.
Consequently
, people's get the job and could spend the money on basic amenities.
Besides
that,
government
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the government
can
also
get the taxes from these enterprises, which they could use to build a new
houses
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house
for needy people.
For example
, countries like, in New Zealand or Canada, many
house
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houses
built by their government to remove the poverty and
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the need of people who don't have the house.
On the other hand
, I believe that opening new companies will result in deforestation and pollution.
For example
, to open up the new
industries
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industry
authorities need a land, and
therefore
they will either cut the trees or buy the land from farmers, but in
these both ways
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both these ways
they will pollute the
environment
. Because companies emit dangerous gases into the
environment
, which will deplete the ozone layer, throw their garbage and chemicals into nearby pool or river, result in water pollution, and
also
use the vehicles to import/export their products, which will create noise and soil pollution. At
last
, it's important for government to take care of their
environment
besides
to opening a new
industries
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industry
. In conclusion, rise up in
economy
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the economy
certainly has some benefits, but I think that its drawbacks outweigh them in
long term
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the long term
.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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