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A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

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Due to huge demand and supply gap, the race for innovation and bringing
latest products
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the latest products
 to the market, new factories are being built rapidly. Sometime, these factories are constructed near communities which might have
positive or negative impact
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a positive or negative impact
 on the
community
. A
factory
 near the
community
 could be very advantageous to the people of that
area
.
Firstly
, it provides jobs to the residents of the
community
. New job opportunities mean better earning, which leads to
improved lifestyle
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an improved lifestyle
. Men
donot
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do not
 have to leave their families in search of jobs to other cities.
Moreover
, new
factories teach
Accept comma addition
factories, teach
 skills to the employees that they were unaware of before.
Furthermore
, the
community
 on
whole benefits
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the whole benefits
 from a single
factory
, as the infrastructure of the areas around the
factory
 improves. New roads are built for
transportation
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the transportation
 of products or bridges might be built to connect areas.
This
further
 improves the living standards. China can be taken as an example, where factories were
setup
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set up
 in small towns to use locals as workers, equip them with skills and in return the towns became developed.
On the other hand
, factories in the nearby
area
also has
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also have
 its disadvantages.
Firstly
, they are a major contributor of pollution. The exhaust fumes
form
a giver or sender
from
 the
factory
 add to the air pollution, the sound of the machines
cause
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causes
 noise pollution which is
also
 very disturbing for the residents of the
area
. Pollution leads to severe health risks for the people. Constant exposure to sound can cause hearing problems, whereas the poor quality of air can cause breathing problems especially
amoung
in the middle of
among
 children. New Dehli
for instance
, where the factories on the outskirts of the city have not only damaged the small towns but
also
 caused deterioration to the air quality of the
area
 around it. Regardless of the fact that building a new
factory
 in the
community
 will be harmful for
environment
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the environment
, I believe that it has more advantages. I fully support the construction of
factory
 as it is very important to improve the living standard of the
community
.
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