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Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion?

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Many
countries
 invest a large sum of money to ease the use of bicycles. The main reason behind
this
 investment is that those
countries
 think that
the
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bicycles help to reduce
traffic
 congestion which is a major
problem
 in city centres. Despite the fact that the promotion of
two-wheeler
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two-wheelers
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 is one of the best
solution
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solutions
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 to address
this
problem
, it alone is not enough to solve
effectively
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it effectively
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. The
bicycle
 plays an important role in alleviating
traffic
jam
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jams
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, and the
countries
where
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that
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 suffer from
the
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traffic
 congestion spend lots of money to encourage people to use the
bicycle
.
For example
, today, a few
of
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major cities
such
 as Amsterdam, Helsinki and Stockholm have achieved to reduce considerably the high level of
traffic
 by both promoting cycling and investing
bicycle
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in bicycle
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 lanes.
Furthermore
, it is known that
such
 investment can improve the air quality of city centres
in
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to
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 a great extent because bikes are more
environmentally-friendly
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environmentally friendly
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 than cars, which greatly contribute to air pollution, and emit zero
emission
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emissions
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.
Therefore
, millions of dollars are spent on riding promotion projects by the governments.
Although
 these projects make
entirely
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a major contribution to
reduce
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reducing
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 the
traffic
 problems, there are
also
 a few alternative ways to alleviate the
traffic
-congestion-related
problem
.
The
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Bicycle
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bicycle
 usage alone is not the solution because every citizen either is not able to ride
the
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a
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bicycle
 or
do
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does
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 not prefer to use
the
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a
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 bike. If the governments,
however
, dream
to reduce
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of reducing
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traffic
 jams by up to the minimum level, they should build new transportation systems
such
 as metro or tram and roads.
Such
 additional projects would help to solve the
traffic
 issues. In conclusion, some
countries
 have spent a lot of money over recent years to address the
traffic
 congestion
problem
. The
problem
 can be reduced by financial investments
made on
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in
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the
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apply
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bicycle
 usage
in
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to
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 some extent, but
this
 is not
a
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the
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 best solution because every citizen would not commute from home to
workplace
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the workplace
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 or other destinations
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