The graph shows the contribution of UK economy . Summarise the information.
The bar chart illustrates information
Change preposition
with irrespect
irrespect
to three sectors (Agricultural, manufacturing and Correct your spelling
respect
Business
and finance ) contribution
to British economic growth within the period of 100 years. And units were measured in percentage.
Replace the word
contributing
Overall
, it can be seen vividly that agricultural
and manufacturing sectors were the main contributors in the first half of the century. Correct article usage
the agricultural
However
their contribution dropped dramatically,Add a comma
,However
while
business
and finance rose rapidly to become the main contributor
.
In terms of agricultural
sector, their contribution rose from around 50% to 55% within the year 1900 to 1950Add an article
the agricultural
,
and was the major Remove the comma
apply
contributor
as opposed to Business
and financial which contributed just about 5% in 1900 and raised to just approximately 10% in the year 1950, therefore
was the least contributor
within the first half of the century.
While
in the 2nd half of the century, Business
and finance rose rapidly from 20% to 40% between 1975 and 2000 respectively and became the leading contributing sector to the British economy as
Change preposition
in
contrast
to Add an article
a contrast
Agricultural
sector Correct article usage
the Agricultural
that
falls dramatically to less than 2% and became the least Correct pronoun usage
which
contributor
to the economy. Whereas
manufacturing service dropped steady
and remains at about 15% within the year 1975 to 2000Change the word
steadily
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words business, contributor with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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