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It is being debated whether we should use credit card or cash mode of payment. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 most of the people
use
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 a
credit
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card
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 as a
mode
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 of
payment
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, some people are still using the paper
money
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 as a
payment
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 option. I would prefer the paper
money
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 over a
credit
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card
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 because it is accessible by everyone, it is a safer way of the
payment
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. So, in my opinion, a
cash
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 system is still the best.
First
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, most of the people today come from a very humble background, they do not have enough
money
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 to buy anything and the
credit
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card
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 approval requires some amount of
money
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 as an assurance so that people can afford to have that
credit
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card
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. It would create a chaos if some people
use
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credit
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 cards and some do not
use
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 it.
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, the needs of the poor people could not be fulfilled.
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, due to lack of
money
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, people could suffer if only a
credit
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card
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 is imposed as a
payment
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 method.
Second
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, there is a great chance of being hacked by a hacker if we
use
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 a
credit
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card
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 as a
mode
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 of
payment
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 everywhere like online shopping, supermarket shopping.
For example
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, in the year 2018 a new of over 3000 persons being hacked and it was all just because of the online shopping by the cashless
mode
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. So, it should be taken care that we should not
use
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 a cashless
mode
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 of the
payment
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 everywhere, even where
cash
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 is accepted. In conclusion, It would not be a fair choice if the government decides to revoke the
cash
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 as a method of the
payment
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. So, until everyone becomes equal in the society in terms of the wealth, it would be a better option to stick with our
cash
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mode
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 of
payment
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