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You wish to apply for a position with a company in your city. Write a letter to the manager of this company and include the following information: your educational background your work experience other information that makes you an ideal candidate for the position

#position #company #city #manager #information #background #work #candidate
Dear Sir, I am writing to express my interest
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 the position
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 Land Surveyor in your company. I have completed my
bachelors
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 degree from the
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university
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 of Delhi in India in
field
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 of civil engineering with majors in the course of surveying. My
post graduation
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 is in construction management from George brown college in Toronto. I have 2 years of experience as
Surveyor
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 with
construction
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 company known as Aecon group which is specialized in land development. Most of my past jobs were in the
field
 using instruments likes laser reader, and GPS extra to take
reading
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 from the ground. As my education and experience
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 in the construction
field
. I am physically fit to work in any environment in the
field
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position required.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, I have a certificate in advance surveying from
Indian
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governement
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government
 which will be a great asset for the position. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Rajbir Singh
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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